Straight talk: an example (12) – Gary North

For educational purposes, we writers should occasionally read, listen to, or view an example of straight talk. It doesn’t matter whether we agree or disagree with the statements – what matters is the way the statements are expressed. This exercise can, by contrast, make us more aware of the evasive diction that besets us every day, so we won’t unconsciously imitate it.

An example of straight talk

The author Gary North (pictured) is widely known for his straight talk. Here’s a sample:

“Ben Bernanke has a pet peeve. It has to do with power – specifically, his. He does not like it when common people have the power to tell him and his Ph.D.-holding peers that they don’t know what they are doing. The common man can veto Bernanke and his peers by cashing in dollars for gold. He resents this.

“The money supply should be supplied by the free market, under the laws of contract. The government should not be in the money business.

“End the FED.”

Many disagree with Gary North, but few misunderstand his words.

The Takeaway: We are often startled by straight talk. We react this way because we have been habituated to euphemistical, effete, evasive diction. I advise you to occasionally read, listen to, or view some straight talk. By contrast, it will help you remain consciously aware of evasiveness – and therefore less likely to unconsciously absorb and imitate evasive diction.

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Writing for the ear

Three days ago in The New York Times, the American writer and critic Constance Hale published a useful lesson about something we writers often overlook: how our sentences would sound if read aloud.

Some writers, such as playwrights and speechwriters, are keenly aware of sound; unfortunately, most of us pay no attention to it. But our readers pay attention, even if subliminally. And that is why sound can add to the clarity and power of what we write for the page.

The Takeaway: Get into the habit of writing for the ear, not just the eye. Read your copy aloud during your edits and you will be surprised how quickly you improve your clarity and power.

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Placement of modifiers (19)

Careless placement of modifiers is a frequent cause of unclear or embarrassing writing. Here’s a recent example of the careless placement of a modifier:

Not much has been revealed about one of the Federal Bureau of Investigation’s newest projects, the Domestic Communications Assistance Center, and the FBI will probably try to keep it that way. Despite attempting to keep the DCAC largely under wraps, an investigation spearheaded by Cnet’s [sic] Declan McCullagh is quickly collecting details about the agency’s latest endeavor. Source

Analysis

The second sentence begins with a modifier, the participial phrase “Despite attempting to keep the DCAC largely under wraps.” When a sentence begins with a participial phrase, the reader normally assumes that the participial phrase modifies the next noun or pronoun; in this case, “investigation.”

But when the reader finishes reading this sentence, he recognizes that the sentence is illogical; it suggests that CNET is both hiding and exposing the DCAC.

Here’s one way to fix the sentence:

Despite the FBI’s attempt to hide the DCAC from reporters, CNET’s Declan McCullagh and other reporters have already succeeded in collecting details.

Reading this version, the reader will more easily recognize who is doing what.

The Takeaway: Don’t make your reader work harder to read a sentence than you worked to write it. It’s bad manners.

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Using commas correctly (3)

In case you missed it, The New York Times ran an excellent article on the use and abuse of commas. Here’s an excerpt:

When an identifier describes a unique person or thing and is preceded by “the” or a possessive, use a comma:

Baseball’s home run leader, Barry Bonds, will be eligible for the Hall of Fame next year.

My son, John, is awesome. (If you have just one son.)

But withhold the comma if not unique:

My son John is awesome. (If you have more than one son.)

The Takeaway: Read the whole article and keep it on file.

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Quotations on thinking, speaking and writing (12)

“ ‘Education’ is a word that covers a lot of very different things, from vital, life-saving medical skills to frivolous courses to absolutely counterproductive courses that fill people with a sense of grievance and entitlement, without giving them either the skills to earn a living or a realistic understanding of the world required for a citizen in a free society.”
~Thomas Sowell (pictured)

“Against criticism a man can neither protest nor defend himself; he must act in spite of it, and then it will gradually yield to him.”
~Goethe

“[At the New York Post,] We had Murray Kempton [on staff,] who wrote like an 18th century restoration dramatist. We had Nora Ephron, who was a brilliant writer when she was a kid, walking into the city room. We had William F. Buckley in the paper. These were not people who thought the audience was stupid. They thought the audience was smart and they wrote up to the audience instead of down. I think that's the kind of paper that's rapidly fading.”
~Pete Hamill

The Takeaway: Keep an open mind. Have a great day.

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Thanks to Paul G. Henning for the Pete Hamill quotation.